Extra Credit

Highschool speech competition:

Grade: 9

 2)Fatima Z:  3^rd culture children

3) Qasim Sheikh:  Poor people

1^st)Nareman Malik: Rich to poor

Content
Quality of ideas – depth; originality; reasoning	9/10
Presentation of ideas – clarity; organization; attention device; thesis; appropriate finish; time limit	9/10
Quality of English – vividness; variety; grammar	9/10
Delivery
Voice – volume; pace; tone; enunciation; confidence	8/10
Physical – poise; eye contact; gestures	8/10
Total: 50 marks	43/50

I n 9^th grade Nareman Malik deserved the first place because I think her information was interesting. I liked the way she compared Shamir and the poor guy. Though her eye contact needs work, her style of reading was much more clear than the other two. My reason to give her first place was her over all accent and articulation.

Grade: 10

3) Zohat Pervez: 2012

2) Rafay Saigol: Hunting is not a crime

1) Danyal Saeed: Religion: Quran burning

Content
Quality of ideas – depth; originality; reasoning	10/10
Presentation of ideas – clarity; organization; attention device; thesis; appropriate finish; time limit	9/10
Quality of English – vividness; variety; grammar	8/10
Delivery
Voice – volume; pace; tone; enunciation; confidence	9/10
Physical – poise; eye contact; gestures	10/10
Total: 50 marks	46/50

In 10^th grade Danyal Saeed deserved the first place because the way he delivered his speech it was excellent he sounded prepared and he didn’t get nervous at all his information was attention-grabbing that a few people who were talking during speeches even they were focusing on his speech and were listening to his speech attentively.

Grade: 11

1) Mustafa tariq: Chicken & egg

3) Zahra sadiq :    Knowledge is power

2) Eisa piracha/Hamza Alam: Tribute

Content
Quality of ideas – depth; originality; reasoning	10/10
Presentation of ideas – clarity; organization; attention device; thesis; appropriate finish; time limit	9/10
Quality of English – vividness; variety; grammar	9/10
Delivery
Voice – volume; pace; tone; enunciation; confidence	9/10
Physical – poise; eye contact; gestures	10/10
Total: 50 marks	47/50

In 11^th grade Mustafa Tariq deserved the first place because his topic and the speech itself was very motivating it actually got me thinking it was a knowledge enhancing speech, a speech which will leave you with such an impression which would stay with you for a long time. He sounded convincible and he knew what he really wanted out of the audience, he knew how good he was while delivering it his confidence showed it all.

Grade: 12

1)Shayan Sadiq: Effects of love

2)Saif Lone: Space colinzation

3)Amina Khalid : arsenic in drinking water

Content
Quality of ideas – depth; originality; reasoning	10/10
Presentation of ideas – clarity; organization; attention device; thesis; appropriate finish; time limit	9/10
Quality of English – vividness; variety; grammar	9/10
Delivery
Voice – volume; pace; tone; enunciation; confidence	9/10
Physical – poise; eye contact; gestures	8/10
Total: 50 marks	45/50

In 12^th grade Shayan Sadiq deserved the first place because his topic reflected most of us in a way. He was speaking clearly at the same time he was confident. His speech made the audience laugh, it was definitely very humorous.  I loved the way he caught peoples attention by saying “Your love is my drug”.

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In regards to my speech, I felt that my speech could have been much better. I felt the length of my speech was very short, but my topic was such, that couldn’t write a really long speech. The audience was already against what I was preaching (I mean wouldn’t they want to party all night ;)).  Even though I looked confident, I thought i was a little nervous in regards to my volume. I feel that I knew my speech, but I need to work on my articulation.  I almost stuttered in the middle.

Today or tomorrow?

 There are so many things that I procrastinate about especially about going to the “gym”.

I always think I’ll go today then tomorrow and it just prolongs. Even though one might say I am thin but that’s not the only thing because a person needs to exercise as its essential for the human body. 

I eat so much of the fast food like Mc. Donalds, Hardees and kfc and i fear that my body's functioning might  mess up someday, so in order to live a healthier life I would need to start exercising and would definitely need “gym” in my life. After all these days of procrastination I hope one day I really make a proper week plan for exercising and will hopefully be successful in it.

Revenge

Once I was with my friends and our car got bumped, we had a minor accident and that person just ran away without coming to any consensus. But we did have the time and patience to follow the person till his house but we didn’t take revenge at that time as all of us were really mad at that person that if we would have seen him somewhere around us my friends would have actually hold him by his collar and god knows what could have happened but oh well it was his lucky day that he managed to escape in those minutes. 

So this was an incident in which we didn’t take any kind of revenge and we just let it go, later on when all of us were relaxed and were over our bad temper we realized that it was good that we didn’t do anything which which would have harmed that person as it would have caused a lot of problems. Believe me at that time i actually felt good and the feeling of  not taking revenge has its own uniqueness. Its a feeling of letting something go without getting something out of it.

Obamas speech assessment

Content	Mark
Quality of ideas – depth; originality; reasoning	9/10
Presentation of ideas – clarity; organization; attention device; thesis; appropriate finish; time limit	9/10
Quality of English – vividness; variety; grammar	8/10
Delivery
Voice – volume; pace; tone; enunciation; confidence	10/10
Physical – poise; eye contact; gestures	10/10
Total: 50 marks	46/50

He has a good word choice fit for a highschooler student actually good for a middle school student. He didn’t use any hard works everything was understandable, the speech flow was outstanding so was the structure.

He had a confident voice, relaxed posture, doesn’t like that he is prepared for it, it seems like a normal conversation. 

He looks towards the left, then right, and then middle acknowledging almost everyone sitting in the audience.

This was interesting, I don’t have the authority to critique it but it think this was not his best speech albeit, good speech.

Hamlet

Dear anonymous,

From what i can see your situation is really complicated but you should understand that eye for and eye does not make sense here. Murder doesn not always mean murder.
Revenge can be accesible even if you confront him and the athorities.
IF you murder him you will be hurting your mother.
forgive and forget
love
abby

Hamlet

Dear Abby,

My soul objective is not to let anyone know who i am but what i can tell you is that im in problem right now and my problem is that my father died. Its was a big shocker to me since he was murdered in our garden. Another shocker came to me when my uncle married my mother, so basically shes my mother and aunt simultaneously. 

The biggest shocker came to me when i saw my fathers ghost, he told me that he was murdered by my uncle and he ordered me to take revenge but not to hurt my mother as hell will prevail.

Me, Myself and I

My name is Laveeza. I have lived in Lahore for most of my life. I have two  brothers and a younger sister. My oldest brother has completed his law degree from the University of Buckingham, he graduated with distinctions. My other brother is in college right now , He is presently studying. My younger sister is studying at Learning Alliance at the moment.

The first thing people thing people think about me when they see me is that i'm arrogant. But a wise man once said "Don't Judge a book by its cover" therefore when you get to know me its different. I prefer to say that i care for my friends. I care for them even if its effecting me in any way.

I plan to go to England for my degree in Fashion design and alongside that i want to take photography classes aswell.